Illogicopedia:Review/IllogiNess Monster

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IllogiNess Monster

I made this some time ago, but I've gradually been revamping it steadily over the months. Testostereich • (ballsack)

Concept:	9	Nessie is one of them legends that seems to have faded out of public eye for a while so it's good to call some attention to that infrequently-seen piece of driftwood. However the "Illogi" part kind of threw me off until I thought about the capitalization. The title needs to have a hyphen added for clarification but other than that this is good.
Execution:	8	Obviously since it's the Illogi-Ness Monster instead of the Loch-Ness Monster it doesn't totally have to follow the mythos so you didn't have to focus totally on that, though the last section should have still been expanded on since it probably is the article's primary aim to parody Nessie. I thought the soccer football part was hilarious, but the early clarification between football and football should have had less axe grinding, more chicken-rubbering if you get me. The Barney parody could have been stupid, but you pulled it off perfectly XD.
Grammar and Formatting:	8	I'm not the best person to ask about grammar but the first image seems very out of place, it should be slightly resized, thumbnailed, and brought into the first section where people can better get the joke.
Images:	8	Again, the first image is great but needs to be resized and repositioned. Also, I think a third picture needs to be added; the first establishes that the article will be crazy and funny, the second enhances the kids' TV joke, then a third one should be put in like a hydrofoil that's supposed to be Illoginessie or something to seals the deal, it tells people that they just read a crazy and funny article.
Miscellany:	10	I'll make the comment here that most articles here have the effect of eyebrow-raising/genrating a strange pucker on me, this one actually made me laugh with the Jurassic Park and Chemical Romance juxtapositions. Plus the entire Kids' TV sections were great.
Final Score:	43	This looks to be another winner by Testostereich, but it needs to be aesthetically improved. Add another image, fix the first one and change the title and it should be ready to join a prestigious lineup.
Reviewer:	Mr. Briggs Inc. 21:09, 15 Aym 2008 (UTC) Eh?

Concept:	9	Yay for the concept! Hm I like the whole idea with the family tree
Execution:	9	I never understood this one. Does this mean how you did over all? Well, I thought that was for the Misc. place Oh well. 9
Grammar and Formatting:	10	Nothing wrong here
Images:	10	once again I love the family tree.
Miscellany:	8	I give an 8 here because I thought I was too nice up there.
Final Score:	46	Ha. I noticed the word 'feature' was bigger. Is that some type of subliminal messaging? If so, you aren't fooling m- I think this deserves a feature.
Reviewer:	--|Fonchezzz| Quacking| 21:13, 15 Aym 2008 (UTC)

DARN BRIGGS! I was in the middle of editing this but you edited it while i was!--|Fonchezzz| Quacking| 21:13, 15 Aym 2008 (UTC)

Guys, guys. Thanks for the reviews both of you, did you like my small aesthetic ammendments? Thanks for the praise *blushes*

Good! The image is now less distracting and making the football thing more lighthearted was a positive change. I still think the article could use a phony pic of the Loch-Ness Monster, if that would not make it too crowded with the literal rubber-chickening. Seems like your article has become another success story if the bar at the top is any indication ;D. Mr. Briggs Inc. 23:04, 16 Aym 2008 (UTC) Eh?