Illogicopedia:Review/The Important Mission
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The Important Mission[edit | edit source]
My biggest EPIC since the pickle, and I like it. :P -- 15:27, 5 Arply 2008 (UTC)
| Concept: | 9 | A crime drama, illogicopedia style. Very nice. Very peculiar. |
| Execution: | 8.5 | Quite well written. A few sections were a little unclear, but nothing major. There was a very noticeable shift in the story as it went from a sort of satire on police brutality to a bizarre, fourth-wall breaking romp, but it worked. It was great fun to read. Perhaps you should bring back a few of the "police negligence" elements at the end though, for continuity's sake. Perhaps the General deliberately set them on fire a second time, because he thought it would be exciting? I liked the end. |
| Grammar and Formatting: | 7 | Umm...one or two typos that I was too lazy to fix. "happend" and one other one, somewhere. Other than that, the formatting is good. |
| Images: | 5 | No images, aside from the red "epic" template. I'm not cruel enough to give it a zero for an image score though. EPICS seem not to lend themselves to images very well, often the events in the stories are highly absurd, and would be difficult to depict in image form. But you could add a picture of a policeman or something if you wanted. |
| Miscellany: | 8 | Miscellaneous items are present. |
| Final Score: | 37.5 | Good work. A nice, gradual build up to an explosive climax. Sort of like Sex. |
| Reviewer: | --THE 18:20, 6 Arply 2008 (UTC) | |
Thanks for reviewing it THE, I'll sort out the typo's and maybe add "said <insert character name> the odd time. I dunno if it's worth adding more police negligence references because I'll just elope and right another couple of sections :P - which, seeing as it's about the same length as The Lion and The Witch in The Wardrobe, I think is long enough. I was going to VFHF it, but I must stay strong to my anti-self nom morals. :P -- 18:38, 6 Arply 2008 (UTC)
- Also I fixed the grammar, can I has 10 for grammar now? :P , trust me, MS Spell check, t'was brutal. Oh and for images, there was that skywriting narrating thing -- 18:55, 6 Arply 2008 (UTC)