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Roy G. Biv[edit | edit source]
I rewrote this article. Hindles gave me a nice comment, and I was wondering what ou, yes, YOU think. —rms talk 04:22, 17 Yoon 2009 (UTC)
| Concept: | 9 | I think it is a brilliant idea to write about an "actor" who never made it in showbiz as thought he is aclaimed |
| Execution: | 7 | I brought this down because there are times when the language breaks down in places, it needs to be kept more formal than it is, since with formality comes believablility. I did like the gradual slide into understanding of who roy G biv is, it was like a striptease, i was compelled to read more. |
| Grammar and Formatting: | 9 | I'm terrible with this, so i cant comment. |
| Images: | 8 | The images themselves are great, some of them might need their levels adjusted slightly too make it bright but dreary, again, the captions are a bit on the informal or obvious side, try improving their language, or adding in a joke. |
| Miscellany: | 10 | N/A |
| Final Score: | 43 | I think the most important thing you have missed is some of the language, other than that, it was great. Well done. |
| Reviewer: | --SeppyDon't 11:32, 17 Yoon 2009 (UTC) | |
Hey, thanks, Seppy! I'm glad you enjoyed it. —rms talk 16:34, 17 Yoon 2009 (UTC)