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Something Stupid This Way Cometh[edit | edit source]
I've made some slight changes, want to know if their is anything I can do to improve this and perhaps get it up for feature. —rms talk 19:40, 10 Yoon 2009 (UTC)
| Concept: | 8 | When I first saw this page the other day I was skeptical, but it's actually quite a good concept. Mostly because of the way you handle it. |
| Execution: | 8 | Standard, pretty fucking good. The only bit that let it down was the unsubtlety of the George Bush bit at the end, could have been done better, but the rest rocked. Anyway, you wanted advice on how to improve it, well that's quite hard. You could potentially make the drawing of the board better, maybe plough effort into the names to get some other angle, or a better drawing, the stupid concept works and by the time you're onto the greens it's quite funny. As for sections, yeah, porn the George Bush bit, and maybe do something about the game counters, like an image or something, or perhaps an extract of people playing, maybe someone drawing an aptly hilarious dunce card, but don't take my word for it, it could be a lame idea. Mostly it's good as is, and I wouldn't make it too much longer. |
| Grammar and Formatting: | 10 | No problem with the formattage |
| Images: | 7 | the first image is good, but could be more pornfessional, if you can manage it. The monopoly guy image itself is good, but could do with a killer caption. The final image seems a bit unecessary, though that may be from the caption. |
| Miscellany: | 8 | Send all cheques payable to Duncy McT |
| Final Score: | 41 | 11:44, 12 Yoon 2009 (UTC) |
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